Do you think businesses should hire employees who will spend their entire lives working for the company? Explain why do you agree or disagree. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

It is clear that nowadays companies want to hire employees which will spend their all
life
working for the
job
. While a number of people believe that
this
is a good deal others argue that
this
is like in the past century when people worked all their
life
without
job
satisfaction. I tend to disagree with the former argument because it is not fair to the common workers from the
association
side.
Firstly
, there are not a plethora of employees who will agree to
work
in
association
for their entire
life
. The reason for
this
is if
this
job
will monotonous people might get
boring
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, and
consequently
, they will not
work
there.
In addition
, these humans which will
applying
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in
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this
corporation,
they
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apply
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even do not know what happen with their
company
for
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at
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this
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time when they will
work
.
For example
, we can hypothesize that
this
company
found a person who
want
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to
work
his entire
life
, but he has a risk due to the fact that
corporation
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can be bankrupt or be bought by another
company
in both situations he can lose
job
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his job
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, so
this
is
disadvantage
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for
worker
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the worker
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.
On the other hand
,
this
is
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a disadvantage
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disadvantage
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for some corporations too.
This
is because not every
association
need that their employees worked entire
life
there.
For instance
,
association
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the association
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should spend their financial budget for creating
good
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the good
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condition
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for
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the worker
a worker
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worker
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workers
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, so
this
person
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people
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feel better
on
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in
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his
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their
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workplace and
this
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the
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company
must calculate if
this
employee will
profitable
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or not. In conclusion, while there are numerous disadvantages to
have
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having
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worker
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a worker
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which
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who
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will
work
his all entire
life
from both sides others think that
his
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he
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is
good
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a good
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opportunity. Personally. I think that
this
is
bad
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a bad
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idea to have
this
kind of
worker
.
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