One problem faced by almost every large city is traffic congestion. What do you think are the cauces of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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almost

every large city is traffic congestion, resulting in a massive loss of time, effort,

money

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, and

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the quality of life and the mental health of the people living in these cities,

in addition

to the environmental damage it causes. In my personal life, I consider myself

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one of

traffic

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jams victims,

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it takes me four hours just to drive for a distance

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more than 25 km, just due to the congestion, which I believe is a

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destructive

situatution

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situation

. In my essay, I'll be discussing the causes and the possible solutions that can put an end to traffic jams. From my

prespective

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, and depending on root causes analysis, the main cause for

this

issue is

ineqaulity

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inequality

in the development made by governments through investing huge amounts of money in

specific

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city

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limited

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number of cities which are probably already a big

city

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and have the basic infra

strucure

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structure

, and excludes smaller suburban ones from the innovation plan,

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creating jobs and making the chosen province more

attactive

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than the other less lucky

Subrubs

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, the residents of poor

neighborhoods

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will find themselves forced to relocate to places where they will find clean water, utilities, jobs, schools, hospitals and all means of decent living. The chain reaction doesn't

stops

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this

point but

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to hit from other sides, the

popluation

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population

growth will be followed by growth in

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of vehicles and

finally

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roads are blocked by thousands or even hundreds of thousands of cars. So, how to solve

this

issue?

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the

first

thing

in my opinion

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equality in funds distribution, all regions and provinces shall have a fair share of the budget,

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, higher tax rates on investors in over-populated places would play an adjusting role.

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, providing an efficient public

transprt

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transport

would be good to some extent.

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Fully explain your ideas

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