One problem faced by almost every large city is traffic congestion. What do you think are the cauces of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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almost
every large city is traffic congestion, resulting in a massive loss of time, effort,
money
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the quality of life and the mental health of the people living in these cities,
in addition
to the environmental damage it causes. In my personal life, I consider myself
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one of
traffic
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jams victims,
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it takes me four hours just to drive for a distance
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more than 25 km, just due to the congestion, which I believe is a
distructive
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destructive
situatution
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situation
. In my essay, I'll be discussing the causes and the possible solutions that can put an end to traffic jams. From my
prespective
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perspective
, and depending on root causes analysis, the main cause for
this
issue is
ineqaulity
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inequality
in the development made by governments through investing huge amounts of money in
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city
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cities
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or
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number of cities which are probably already a big
city
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and have the basic infra
strucure
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structure
, and excludes smaller suburban ones from the innovation plan,
consequently
creating jobs and making the chosen province more
attactive
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attractive
than the other less lucky
Subrubs
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Suburbs
,
Thus
, the residents of poor
neighborhoods
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will find themselves forced to relocate to places where they will find clean water, utilities, jobs, schools, hospitals and all means of decent living. The chain reaction doesn't
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at
this
point but
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continuous
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popluation
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population
growth will be followed by growth in
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of vehicles and
finally
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roads are blocked by thousands or even hundreds of thousands of cars. So, how to solve
this
issue?
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the
first
thing
in my opinion
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is
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equality in funds distribution, all regions and provinces shall have a fair share of the budget,
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, higher tax rates on investors in over-populated places would play an adjusting role.
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, providing an efficient public
transprt
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transport
would be good to some extent.
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