Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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I think every subject is important for us. We have to learn everything through our past, present and future. Some
people
say that History is one of the most important school subjects it’s true but it has to go along with today’s world which is
science
and
technology
. How can we move without our history, the
people
behind us “The ancient
people
” is the most powerful
people
who
pushes
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us to move forward. They taught us how to fire a light, how to find
a food
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, how to live with other
and
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animals, how to survive and others. Of course, we wouldn’t know that without them.
Science
and
Technology
are important too. They give us a chance to move forward with them. Without
Science
and
Technology
, we’re just
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normally
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human-beings
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human beings
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. We spend our daily life with no useful. Without
them
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we have no light we have no food, and we have no comfortable stuff
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things. Old
people
could survive without these things. Humans
creates
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lots of invention to give
an unlimited wants
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of
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people
based on a limited government. May I give one example of the development of
science
and
Technology
.
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With these
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two things it gives us a chance to be a member of
ASEAN
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the ASEAN
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“Association of South East Asia Nation” we can be able to communicate with the other 9 countries with
the
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high
technology
. It helps us to be a TEAMWORK with the 9 other countries to develop our country. Help us in terms of transportation, communication, collaboration etc. it can definitely hold on to that hope
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in the near future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural heritage
  • Historical perspective
  • Analytical skills
  • Contextual understanding
  • Technological advancements
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Mathematics)
  • Innovation
  • Interdisciplinary
  • Job market
  • Climate crisis
  • Cultural identity
  • Critical thinking
  • Humanities
  • Contemporary issues
  • Integration
  • Tech-savvy
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