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Compare and contrast the population growth from 1950 to 2000 in China, India and the USA.

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The given chart presents the population numbers
through
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 a period of time in China,
in
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India and USA. In all 3
countries
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 there has been a steady rise through the decades from 1950 to 2000. In 1950, Chinese citizens were
first
 recorded to be less than 600
million
. With an exception of a minor decline in 1960, the number increased gradually and in 2000, it reached almost 1300
million
. The Indian trend seems to behave in a similar way. Starting at a little less than 400
million
 the Indian population increased steadily through the decades eventually reaching more than double
of
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their initial number
over
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 1000
million
 individuals in 2000.
Lastly
, it
is notice
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 that the pattern in the USA differs. There has, too, been a steady increase but it is clearly more distinct
,
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 since the numbers start at a little less than 200
million
 and end up making around 300
million
 people.
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