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Band 3.5

Some people believe that uniform should be made compulsory part of the workplace, some disagree, discuss both view and give your opinion.

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These days many people are obliged to wear a
uniform
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 in a certain company to
shows
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show
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its
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their
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 identity but
in
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on
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the contrary
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contrary
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,contrary
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 some people argued it's not necessary to wear a
uniform
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. Both
side
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sides
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have
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 their own reasons why which I will explain more about them below.
Firstly
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, in a company where the
uniform
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are
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is
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compulsory
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a compulsory
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 part of the work,
surely
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it surely
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to
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has to
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 differentiate its
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staffs
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staff
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 or not. The mentors will
now
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know
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 well about
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a worker
the worker
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worker
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workers
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 who don't work
good
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well
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 or
even
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are even
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 absent in their place.
For
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instance
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,instance
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 the mentors
cen
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can
 recognise the
staffs
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 who are not in the working places
by
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in
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the
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their
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uniform
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. I do believe they want to make their
works
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work
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easily
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easy
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 to do and to make the
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staffs
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staff
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discipline
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disciplined
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.
On the other hand
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,
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a uniform
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uniform
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uniforms
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 are not necessary since the workplace
in
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is in
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 the building. The
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staffs
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staff
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 said that
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uniform
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the uniform
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 is a symbol for those who
working
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work
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 in the public. So no need to wear the
uniform
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 if we work in a building.
In addition
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, they argued working
by
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in
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uniform
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 is always out of date since the
advance
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advanced
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 label of working by
finger prints
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fingerprints
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 and by the outcome we bring. To sum up, both wearing
uniform
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 or not have
right
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the right
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 reasons to deal with.
Wether
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whether
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 to make the workers
discipline
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disciplined
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 or to ease the mentors to see the job description of the workers.
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