Some people believe that mobile phone conversations should be banned in crowded and social places. Others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

• In our modern life, technology has been developing day by day because nowadays adolescents are not able to imagine their lives without

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and they are drugging

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the majority of individuals point out that, telephone conversations must be forbidden in public

places

and crowded.

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others do not

agree

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this

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people

do not have to use

smartphones

when they move in public

places

and

crowded

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are crowded

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. • On the one hand, the majority of inhabitants say that

,

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the government should be prohibited

for

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humans

to chats with their close

people

and other

people

through

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telephones in the street or

local

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in local

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places

because there are a lot of negative effects

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humans

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health.

First

of all, if

people

act while talking on the phone they can face various disasters

such

as car accidents

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also

phones emit a big amount of radiation which is very harmful

for

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our eyes and even ears.

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according to the statistics, nowadays 90% of car accidents are caused by drivers talking on the phone while driving and even passengers moving in the local

places

while talking on

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smartphones

and using headphones. •

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, others think that the government should be allowed to move in the street while utilizing

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smartphones

and headphones because nowadays many

humans

are extremely busy and they do not have enough time to catch up on all their work and they have to do some works on the go.

Moreover

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sometimes there are calls that are important to

people

and they need to answer the call even if they are moving

in

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the

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public

places

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analysis, despite the fact that

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some

humans

think that the government should be disallowed

for

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humans

to

talking

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on the phones when they

moving

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move

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on

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the

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public

places

.

However

other

people

do not

agree

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it. I think

,

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it is extremely awful for hum