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Band 4.5

Most large companies nowadays operate multi-nationally. To what extent multinational companies have responsibility toward local communities in which they operate?

It is true that the majority of big corporations operate on a global scale;
therefore
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, these companies have partial responsibility for the area where they are located.
This
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 essay strongly agrees with
this
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 point through an analysis of
local
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the local
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 people's work and quality of
life
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. The first point is that multinational associations provide locals with a better chance of finding work. When these
organizations
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 expand their operations into new territories,
the first step is
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 to sign a commitment with the government to use local labour. Following
that is
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 location research, which is best accomplished by hiring locals.
As a result
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, the community has more job options, which helps them live
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better
life
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.
This
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 is why I believe that multinational corporations have an impact on the labour market. Another point is that job opportunities improve the quality of
life
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 for locals. Ordinarily, international companies always have higher requirements, so their staff
gets
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 better-paid salaries than domestic enterprises. With
this
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 remuneration, individuals spend more on their education, food, and entertainment. Obviously, the local standard of living has improved, and they are delightful. In
this
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 regard, I believe that a higher salary would raise one's standard of living to a higher level. In conclusion, multinational corporations that want to develop their businesses around the world would benefit residents by creating more jobs and
also
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 helping to improve their quality of
life
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. As
such
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, I completely support the idea that these institutions have partial responsibility toward the local communities in which they operate.

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task response
State your view at the start and keep to it; add more detail on how firms help locals beyond jobs.
coherence
Use clear link words and make a smoother flow from one idea to the next.
evidence
Add real facts or clear examples from a place to back up your points.
stance
Clear view is stated.
content
Idea of jobs and money to life is clear.
structure
Conclusion repeats the view and ends well.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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