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In some schools and universities, girls tend to choose art subjects (example literature), and boys tend to choose science subjects (example physics). Why do you think is so? Should this tendency be changed? Do you agree or disagree?

#schools #universities #girls #art #subjects #literature #boys #science #physics #tendency
Some more about corporate сulture in
this
company
: 1) Our team was the best team for 5
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 (как сказать 5 из 5?) and we have done group photos and donated out premium in shelter for homeless animals. 2) We had supervisors who could arrive
to
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 the
work place
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workplace
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 without warning and check our work (and check that we don`t
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 fraud). 3) Once
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 my workplace
came
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a girl from
company
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the company
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 - competitor and I
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 about
this
 to my team lead. I was wondering
then
 she said I have to
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 communicate with her and prepare the report about their
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business
 process and their scripts. I
thouth
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thought
though
 "Why not?". So working at
this
company
 was
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a good
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 experience for me. Another
company
which
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 corporate
culture
 I would like to discuss is "
Ernst&Young
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Ernst & Young
", one of the companies which
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 "BIG-4". It is mainly (в основном) audit
company
 and I
was intern
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their
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there
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 for 3
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at
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 third course. My salary was 38000 rubles and I worked
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60-70 hours per week. It is very funny if we compare salary, workload and
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 with my
previos
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previous
 job. It was
funny
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 story
how
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of how
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 I got an offer. To be honest, I was planning to work there but I
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afraid
 that I wouldn`t get the interview and
got
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 the one-year ban so I wanted to prepare better. But in
there
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their
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 VK group they have done a raffle of testing
interview
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 without any bans even if you didn't get success (мне кажется тут ошибка). So I
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won
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this
 raffle (lucky random) and on
interview
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an interview
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feeled
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 very
confidently
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 and it was very easy to pass two
interviewes
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interviews
 and got an offer.
This
company
 has structured and
tought
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taught
thought
 corporate
culture
 because of two reasons - It has more than 300 thousand
employers
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employees
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 all over the world and it is client orientired
company
. We had our own notepad and pen with
company`s
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 logo. We worked in
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the clients
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clients
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office
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 so we had
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a bussiness
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bussiness dresscode
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business dress code
. I worked
at
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 4 different projects and we had some rules
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communication
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communicating
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 with clients. It is
challenging
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a challenging
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 job and I am sure that it is one
the
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 corporate
culture
point
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 because everyone
knew
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 about workload and it is absolutely normal in all "BIG-4" companies. Another corporate
culture
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 they all have the principle "up or out" which means that you will grow or you will be fired (как сказать либо либо?). By the way, I think it is
right
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 non-formal rule and I am trying to follow it by myself despite of that at my current job we don`t have
this
 rule. Working
in
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 "Ernst&Young" was
great
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expirience
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experience
 for me and
nice
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 point
in
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on
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 my CV. After
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internship
internsheep
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internsheep,
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 they got me
anoffer
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an offer
 and suggested to become through
severals
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several
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month
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months
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 in their staff but I refused (+ слово в словарь) because their labour compensation was too small for
such
 kind of workload. What is more, the audit was too boring for me.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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