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Some people say that individuals should change jobs during their working life often while others believe that doing the same job has advantages to individuals, companies, and society.

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Nowadays have are people believe their changing careers is best for their
life
 but some people believe doing the same
job
 will be more advantageous for them,companies and society.
To begin
 with,I will talk about people who believe in more careers are best for their lives
the
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in the
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first
 paragraph and will talk about doing some same work that has advantages more for their
life
 after.
Firstly
,I think someone who believes doing more
job
 is better because their think experience in
life
 is valued more than others thing and sometimes I think that an adventure more than doing their expert skill.
For example
, the experience can lead them to have more creativity for another
job
 and in normal
life
.
in addition
 , there have more adventure due to if you do you don't expect it will not make you enough confidence and that will release insulin to give you power.
Secondly
,I will talk about someone who thinks doing the same
job
 have advantages more for their
life
, maybe their peoples believe
one
 human can only focus on
one
 thing.
For instance
,If they are just only focused on
one
 thing will do better than do two or three things at the same time. In conclusion,my opinion is anyone has their own way in their
life
 and
that is
 their choice to select their own
life
 and what are their wants to do.
However
,for me I think my way is doing
one
job
 is better than changing jobs during my working
life
 because of me is like to focus and doing in
one
 thing at a time.
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