You recently bought a piece of equipment for your kitchen but it did not work. You phoned shop but no action was taken. Write a letter to the shop manager. In your letter - describe the problem with equipment - explain what happened when you phoned the shop - and say what you would like the manager to do

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing with regard to the washing

machine

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I purchased from your store recently. I

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want to bring to your attention customer service. The washing

machine

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is SONY X958. I placed the order 1st of September and it was delivered

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last

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Saturday. The appliance was working fine after installation,

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, when I tried to use it

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the same night after dinner, the

machine

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did not function anymore. I suspect there is something wrong with the engine as I heard an unusual sound when I turn on the power. I rang your customer service the

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day. The assistant from the post-purchase department I spoke to could not provide any useful instructions. He assured me that he would report the issue to the shop manager and return a call within 24 hours. But that was two days ago, and I am still waiting for your call. It is very disappointing. As my washing

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is still under quality warrant, I am entitled to request it to be repaired or replaced. I have decided that I would like a replacement washing

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. I

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would like to receive an update regarding how would you improve

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customer service in the future. I await your prompt response. Yours faithfully, Yoko Smith

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

216 words

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Your local newspaper is offering an award for people who have helped the community. Write a letter to the newspaper editor. In your letter

increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems.

Children are now less active in their free time than in the past. Therefore,sport lessons must be compulsory in school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

A person's worth nowadays, seems to be judged according to social statues and material possession. Old- fashion values such as honor, kindness and trust no longer seem important. Do what extent do you agree or disagree ?

Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development ?