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Some people think that it is best to save money, for example in a bank or savings scheme. Other people feel that money should be spent whenever it is available. Discuss these views and reach an opinion on this debate.

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Few people believe that
money
 should be saved, while others believe whenever you get
money
 just spend it. In my opinion, people should keep the
money
 just in case of any
future
 emergency or any other plans.
Money
 can be saved, by keeping them in a bank and any other saving scheme as it is so beneficial, and it can help you in the
future
,
such
 as if you need
money
 for
future
 education or you get an emergency in the
future
 like an accident or something else at that time if you don’t have any
money
then
 how can you deal with
such
 kind of Situation.
For example
, there is a famous saying that,
Money
 is like a spare tire in your car, if your car’s tire is punctured on a highway and you don’t have a spare tire in it,
then
 you will face lots of difficulties so, in a result if you got Extra
money
 you must save it, In Today’s World of advertising and social media saving
money
 is not an easy task.
In other words
, whenever we are scrolling on Instagram or Facebook, they mostly show us the advertisement related to our interests, and
then
 it is very difficult for us to control, so we spend our
money
 on buying that item and we just say enjoy the moment to make our self feel that we have done a good thing but later when we need
money
 for something else and we got nothing in our bank
then
 we regret about it. In conclusion, some are spending
money
 on luxury items rather than saving them,
however
, in my opinion, we should save
money
 for
future
 needs and emergencies.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial security
  • unforeseen circumstances
  • accumulate
  • stimulate demand
  • economic growth
  • quality of life
  • financial balance
  • budgeting
  • expenditures
  • personal goals
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