The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age.

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THIS

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THE

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GRAPHS BELOW SHOW THE

VAIRTY

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VARIETY

OF 3 MUSIC ALBUMS CONSOMD BY BRITAIN ANTAY

CLASSFLIED

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CLASSIFIED

TO GERAND AND AGE.IT IS CLEAR FROM THE GRAPH THA similarities BETWEEN THE POP AND ROCK

PERCENTABE

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PERCENTAGE

ACCORDIND

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ACCORDING

TO WHAT IS SHOWN, WE HAVE THE SAME

DIFFRENTS

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DIFFERENT

IN PERCENTAGE

EYWEEN

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BETWEEN

MALE

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MALES

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FEMALE

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,30% AND 20%, RESPCTITY.

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, THE BIG GROUP PURCHASED THE ROCK AND POP ALBUMS IS THE

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YOUNGEST

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PRESNT

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PRESENT

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THE FIRST 16-24 AND THE

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SECOND

25-34 .

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EVERY THING

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EVERYTHING

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THANGE

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CHANGE

IN THE

THERD

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TYPE IS A CLASSICAL. WE CAN SEE THE decline IN

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GENERAL

,AND THE BIG SUPRISE IS THE PEPOL

BIGER

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BIGGER

THAN 45 THEY PURCHASED 20% AND MORE OVER

BECOM

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BECOME

THE FIRST

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CUSTOMER

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COULD

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SAY THA

ESSENHTIAL

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ESSENTIAL

DIFFRENT

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DIFFERENT

DIFFERENCE

IS BETWEEN THE SEX,

ADDITIANALLY

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ADDITIONALLY

THE

SIMILRY

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SIMILAR

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IN THE ROCK AND POP

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CLASSC

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CLASSIC

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Complete response

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143 words

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The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age.

Some people argue that all experimentation on animals is bad and should be outlawed. However, others believe that important scientific discoveries can be made from animal experiments. Can experimentation on animals be justified? Are there any alternatives?

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