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The birth rate in most developed countries is predicted to begin to fall over the next 50 years. By 2030 it is estimated that over one third of the population in most developed countries will be aged 65 and over: What effects will these predictions have on developed countries if they prove true? What can be done now to deal with this situation? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words

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There is no doubt that these days statistics show a reduction
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all over the world especially
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early and middle adulthood will reduce the capability of
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 traffics jam and climate pollution that lead to significant threatening
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all the hazards that
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 of animals and people will be solved
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caused by infection and
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 in the future decades.
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 must ensure steps are taken to prevent
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 phenomenon from deteriorating future
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financial assistance for those who can not get married and afford parenting
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,so the individual could be motivated to have more children.
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