Nowadays shopping has become a new favorite pastime for young people. What are the reasons for this? should they be encouraged to develop other hobbies?
As we know, the young generation gets
board
very soon because of having too much leisure Correct your spelling
bored
time
. Therefore
they are searching for new hobbies all the time
. And nowadays purchesing
new stuff has Correct your spelling
purchasing
became
their new Change the verb form
become
hobbie
. There can be several reasons Correct your spelling
hobbies
hobby
behinde
it Correct your spelling
behind
such
as payment and mindset. And On the other
hand
some Add a comma
,hand
people
believe it's better to make them choose the other ways of time
passing activities too. In this
essay
I will Add a comma
,essay
dicuss
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discuss
reosons
and some beliefs about that.
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reasons
Firstly
, It's really important that
who earns the Correct word choice
apply
money
and who spends it! Or as Correct article usage
the american
american
old saying "It's all about Change the capitalization
American
money
!". This
mean's that most of
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apply
young
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the young
people
don't spend their own money
for buying goods. Hence
, thay
are being bought Correct your spelling
they
by
"father's Change preposition
with
money
" and that leads to young people
spend
too much Wrong verb form
spending
money
than they supposed
to spend. Add a missing verb
are supposed
Secondly
, The materialistic mindset has spreaded
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spread
out
all over the world. For Change preposition
apply
instence
one of my friends think's that It's better to have the most expensive product of Correct your spelling
instance
it's
own kind. So he always buys some expensive clothes like fur!
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its
On the other hand
, some people
think it's better to educate youth improve
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to improve
the
Change the word
their
sence
of Correct your spelling
sense
fullfilment
by doing some Correct your spelling
fulfilment
valueable
activities as a hobby. Correct your spelling
valuable
This
way, not only they won't get board
but Correct your spelling
bored
also
they can make some value for their own society. For example
, in an experiment on japanese
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Japanese
sudents
, it turned out that Correct your spelling
students
encourageing
them by making some cartoons about the pleasure of being Correct your spelling
encouraging
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a creator
creator
leads to them being Fix the agreement mistake
creators
convinient
and not just a Correct your spelling
convenient
money
consumer
Fix the agreement mistake
consumers
adolecent
on the Correct your spelling
adolescent
next
years.
in conclusion, buying goods just for avoiding from
being Change preposition
apply
board
can not Correct your spelling
bored
results
in Change the verb form
result
good
situation and it will be just a Correct article usage
a good
time
-consuming activity and wasting
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waste
time
. Instead
, some people
argue that if we educate young
generation in Add an article
the young
other
way, it will be fantastic for them and Change the wording
another
also
for society and I agree with them.Submitted by Aryanafraz1997 on
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