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Food travels thousands of miles from producer to consumers. Some people think it would be better for the environment and the economy if people only ate local food produced by farmers. To what extent do you agree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevent examples from you own knowledge and experience.

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Due to
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globalisation
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 the public is enabled to taste different
foods
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 throughout the year, regardless of the place they live in. Whilst many people think it is better to consume imported
food
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 I personally believe eating locally grown
foods
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 have several significant benefits in terms of economy and environment. It is irrefutable that consuming fresh
food
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that is
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 grown in one's own country has crucial advantages.
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, if
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people consume local products it is good for earning hard currency in
export
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the export
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 market. Because we can empower the farmers and the excess
food
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 can be exported to other nations.
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, a specific land can be self-sufficient if they grow their own crops. Not only the financial benefits but
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 there are environmental privileges. Due to the fact that when a solidarity nation reduces imports it
minimise
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carbon
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foot print
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.
for example
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, if Sri Lanka
grow
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 apples, we do not want to import them from western
countries
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.
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, it reduces
carborn
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carbon
emission
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emissions
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.
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result
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 it stops global warming.
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, eating locally has its disadvantages too.
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, some
countries
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 which have seasons cannot grow some
foods
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.
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, coffee is not grown in western
countries
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 but
highly
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 consumed in those
countries
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 during winter.
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, importing
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 is good for the nutritional
values
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value
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.
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, migrants in Australia can taste spices from their own motherlands when they are
abundontly
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abundantly
 available in the stores. In conclusion, importing
foods
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 has its own drawbacks as well as
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positive
 aspects as discussed above. According to my point of view, I believe consuming locally is better for the economy and for the environment.
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