Some countries today have passed laws against smoking tobacco in public buildings such as offices and restaurants. Other countries have no intention of doing this. Consider the possible arguments on both sides of this debate, and reach your own conclusion on which side you favor.

Nowadays, some states implemented a law prohibiting smoking in public places,
whereas
other states prefer not to impose
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both supporters and opponents have their own sides, and I will outline both arguments in
this
essay. On the one hand, proponents of restricting
tobacco
usage in crowded locations, cite that,
this
policy might reduce
consumption
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of cigarettes.
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countries whose
tobacco
industries are immense,
therefore
producing
tobacco
occupies half of their
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budget, might face recession.
Moreover
, critics
also
highlight, that regulators have no intent to restrict people’s
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. Authorities who support
this
idea,
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that
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it is a personal matter to choose whether or not to smoke cigarettes.
However
, opponents of banning or limiting
tobacco
usage in enclosed areas, state that,
tobaccos
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bring hazardous effect to the community, particularly for infants, and
elderly
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the elderly
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.
Following
this
social demand, governments adopt and implement laws to protect their citizens from exposure to
tobacco
smoke in enclosed public places, workplaces and public transport.
Furthermore
, countries which, support the idea, are among the developed nations, that have advanced organizations,
constitutions
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. For instance,
according to
researchers in Scandinavian countries,
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the adoption of comprehensive legislation led to very significant drops in
tobacco
smoke exposure within
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time period. To supporters of
this
idea, the benefits of
this
law are convincing.
Overall
, I would tend to side with the opponents of smoke-free regulations. It seems to be reasonable to legislate smoke-free control within public spaces.
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