Write about the following topic. In many countries it is now illegal to smoke in public places. It is only fair that people who wish to smoke should have to leave the building. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, many countries made a rule against smoking
cigarette
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cigarettes
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in public places.they are designated are for
who
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those who
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want to smoke because
it's
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it
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spoil
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spoils
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the environment . I totally agree with that point so let us review
in
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the essay.
Firstly
, most people have smoking habits it will affect their health and
also
others.our government made a lot of rules
for
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to
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reduce
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reducing
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pollution and they have
concern
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the concern
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to decrease the usage of cigarettes in public .In
the
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apply
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recent times,
youngesters
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youngsters
addicted to smoking because they think it's
fashion
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and style.They watch
lot
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a lot
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of cinemas and admire heroes'
activities
after that they followed their styles .mostly youngsters don't realise the impact of smoking.
For example
, a recent survey explored ten of one adult affected with cancer due to smoking.
Secondly
, In the mall, public parks and people crowded areas have separate smoking places for those who are addicted to the habit.
however
, most people put the ash tricks
to
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public places it will pollute the area . Those
activities
harm
to
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apply
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public
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a public
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place
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places
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and spoil
others
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others'
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health .
Last
week we went
a
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mall for shopping that time we were waiting at the parking slot. One guy threw the scissor into the dustbin later dustbin got fired. Strict rules will help to prevent these careless
activities
. To all put it into a nutshell, these
activities
will reduce pollution and saves public health.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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