Write about the following topic. In many countries it is now illegal to smoke in public places. It is only fair that people who wish to smoke should have to leave the building. Do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, many countries made a rule against smoking
cigarette
in public places.they are designated are for Fix the agreement mistake
cigarettes
who
want to smoke because Correct pronoun usage
those who
it's
Unnecessary verb
it
spoil
the environment . I totally agree with that point so let us review Correct subject-verb agreement
spoils
in
the essay.
Correct pronoun usage
it in
Firstly
, most people have smoking habits it will affect their health and also
others.our government made a lot of rules for
Change preposition
to
reduce
pollution and they have Change the verb form
reducing
concern
to decrease the usage of cigarettes in public .In Change the article
the concern
the
recent times, Correct article usage
apply
youngesters
addicted to smoking because they think it's Correct your spelling
youngsters
fashion
and style.They watch Replace the word
fashionable
lot
of cinemas and admire heroes' Change the article
a lot
activities
after that they followed their styles .mostly youngsters don't realise the impact of smoking. For example
, a recent survey explored ten of one adult affected with cancer due to smoking.
Secondly
, In the mall, public parks and people crowded areas have separate smoking places for those who are addicted to the habit.however
, most people put the ash tricks to
public places it will pollute the area . Those Change preposition
in
activities
harm to
Change preposition
apply
public
Add an article
a public
place
and spoil Fix the agreement mistake
places
others
health . Change noun form
others'
other's
Last
week we went a
mall for shopping that time we were waiting at the parking slot. One guy threw the scissor into the dustbin later dustbin got fired. Strict rules will help to prevent these careless Change preposition
to a
activities
.
To all put it into a nutshell, these activities
will reduce pollution and saves public health.Submitted by keyarthi on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite