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Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out.

#english #school #languages #risk
Learning a foreign vocabulary is not much more important than learning a mother's vocabulary. As
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 the students will face huge problems in the future. I agree with that statement. Because learning an international accent will help when communicating with other countries.
In addition
 to that, many of the
books
 are written in
English
 than in the local
language
.
Therefore
,
English
 is very useful when improving knowledge too. Nowadays, the world become smaller than earlier because of technology.
Hence
, sharing information with each other is very important.
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 the other hand, it will help to stop the rising problems which are happening due to miscommunication. As an example, when unable to understand the feelings and cultures of one nation from another different nation clearly they cannot exchange their feelings clearly and sometimes, it will cause to start a war with these countries. Another point is, reading
books
 is the most valuable for updating knowledge as well as sharing knowledge. Some subject area has not had enough
books
 which have been written using the local
language
. In that instant, when people need to collect more information, they can gather theories about what they want from
books
 or via the internet if they are flaunted in
English
 as a froing
language
. I would like to conclude that, learning
English
 has more value than learning a local
language
 as
English
 has been acting as a bridge to link people who are living all over the world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global communication
  • economic opportunities
  • cultural diversity
  • endangered
  • linguistic heritage
  • inclusive
  • multilingualism
  • language revitalization
  • language policy
  • language preservation
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