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Some people believe that teenagers should focus on all school subjects while others think that they should concentrate on the subjects where they do the best or find the most interesting. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #teenagers #focus #school #subjects
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PARENTS MUST NEED TO GIVE ENOUGH EDUCATION UNTIL THEIR CHILDREN TURN 18 YEARS OLD. BECAUSE
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, EVERYONE NEEDS TO SEE
SCHOOL
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LIFE
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 AND STUDY ON SOME
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SUBJECTS
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, IN BETWEEN, THEY SHOULD NEED TO CHECK WHICH IS THE BEST FIELD OR ACTIVITIES, WHOSE THEY WANT TO DO MORE AND MORE ON A DAILY BASIS.
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, STUDENTS NEED TO STUDY MANY
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, SOME TEENAGERS WILL BECOME BORED WITH THEIR STUDIES.BUT,
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 IS THE RESPONSIBILITY OF PARENTS AND
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 TEACHERS, WHO STUDY AND GIVE THEM DIRECTION IN THEIR
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. AS WELL AS , THEY NEED TO ALWAYS TRY TO MAKE THEM INTERESTED IN A
SCHOOL
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LIFE
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SCHOOL
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SUBJECTS
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 ARE ALWAYS NECESSARY OR USEFUL AFTER
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LIFE
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 FOR MAKING A GOOD CAREER. THERE ARE MANY PEOPLE WHO DO NOT EVEN COMPLETE THEIR PRIMARY
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. AS A CONSEQUENCE, THEY ARE FACING MANY PROBLEMS IN A JOB PLACE OR IN MATURE
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. A PERIOD OF ADOLESCENCE IS A VERY IMPORTANT
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. FROM
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 POINT, THEY HAVE A GOOD
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 FOR CHOOSING THEIR CAREER. LIKE, WHAT THEY WANT TO DO IN A ADULT
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 , AND HOW THEY WANT TO SEE THEMSELVES IN FRONT OF THE COMPETITIVE WORLD.
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, IN WHICH FIELD THEY ARE MORE INTERESTED OR WHAT DO THEY WANT TO LIKE TO DO MOST
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 BECAUSE EVERY MIND IS NOT THE SAME OR EVERYONE ARE NOT SPECIAL IN
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 SPECIATION FIELD. THEY
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 NEED TO GIVE SOME
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 IN WHICH THEY ARE MOST TALENTED. IN A CONCLUSION, I WANT TO SAY THAT BOTH ARE THE IMPORTANT FOR MINORS AGES, OWING TO
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SUBJECTS
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 DO NOT TAKE PLACE OF
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 SPECIFIC ACTIVITY OR
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 SPECIAL TALENT OR HOBBIES DO NOT COVER THE
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • versatility
  • critical thinking
  • well-rounded education
  • career paths
  • early specialization
  • cross-disciplinary skills
  • exposure to
  • motivation
  • deeper learning
  • expertise development
  • subject specialization
  • academic performance
  • mental health
  • balanced approach
  • core subjects
  • electives
  • passion-driven learning
  • foundational skills
  • individual student strengths
  • flexibility in education
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