Write about the following topic: Nowadays, marketers have left no stone unturned to entice customers. Certain fast food companies and restaurants now tie up with schools to endorse their products. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

,Well it is an undeniable fact that living in
this
fast growing
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nation each and every
pupils
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attract towards fast
food
as it is not only tasty but
also
stall offers it in
such
low price . Some people imagine that eating
such
things is great whilst few say it is bad for health . Somehow , most
of
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companies
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the companies
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target
on
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small children who can easily make
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argument
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with their parents to eat .
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, every coin has two
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so there are some
benifts
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benefits
and drawbacks of market unhealthy
food
.
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with ,
company
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companies
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use to put their store near bachelors house or
students
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house
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so that they can get fresh items in
short
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the short
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time period and students love to consume daily because they do not have sufficient time for their work or day .
Furthermore
, human beings who
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shop make
interresting
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interesting
advertisment
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advertisement
i
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in
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school , colleges and
also
in job company so they can make
such
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profit by marketing in
such
places .
Nonetheless
, The junk snack business is growing nowadays because of the alluring offers and mouth-watering meals
that
is
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been made by them, and they
also
give
door to door
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delivery with help of
food
chain
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chains
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like Swiigy , as well as Zomato .
For Instance
,
is
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last
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few years the ratio of online packaging has
been
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increased by 45% and mankind
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to say no outside hotels . On the other
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hands
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there are some
dis-advantages
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also
, making
tie
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up with
such
places small
child
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children
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get habitual of
particual
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particular
products which
is
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bad for
mindset
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their mindset
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.
Additionally
, eating dehydrated
food
on
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dsily
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daily
basis is bad for our health proven by doctors .
Last
but not the least , statistics too much swallow of fast
food
could create obesity,which is so common
in
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recent
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. To cite an
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, as per
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article published in "THE HUFFINGTON POST" individuals who
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devour
cantten
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canteen
content
items get some
desiases
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diseases
like TB , Sugar ,
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in
such
small time . What the study reveals is , ingesting finger
food
occasionally is proactive but as per
anticent
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ancient
beings home
food
is not only best for our health but
it
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is
also
good for our
organ
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of sight .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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