tv channels show more men's sports than women's sports. why is it like that? sould tv channels give equal time for them?

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everyone that
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channels
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focus on
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's sports. while few
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broadcast women's
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. In
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broadcasters are targeting more male
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than female and why
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shall be accepted. No doubt that
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have the majority of
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audiance
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audience
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drive
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to publish
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men
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games
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in order to satisfy the
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demand and give them the opportunity to increase
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profit
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a considerable amount by selling
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advertisements
to other business. While
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there are plenty of female
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 around the world,
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men
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shows
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interest in
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games
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one in ten
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football fans around the world have watched one women's football
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games
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last
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year.
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,
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channels
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has
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been
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criticised
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less
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content. while
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is
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true and not deniable. It is quite difficult for publishers to do so as the main revenue stream from the
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came from the audience. And
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providing something they do not like will have a
catestrophic
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catastrophic
impact on their financial statement. In conclusion, I believe that
TV
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channels
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shall not push unwanted content to
thewir
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their
audience as
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will harm their profit.
instead
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, they can devote more programs about female sports.
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