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he global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games between 2000 and 2006. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given chart compares the profit-making from video
games
 in a six-year period from 2000 to 2006 around the world. The information is provided in billions of
dollars
. As data suggests, at the beginning of the new millennium the most profitable were Handfield and Console
games
( 11 and 6 billion
dollars
 relatively).
However
, in the
next
 6 ,years they showed different patterns. Looking into details, Handfield
games
 had a steady rise with slight fluctuations in 2003-2005 and reached a peak of almost 18 billion
dollars
 per year in 2006, whereas Console ones showed a downward trend and reached the point of fewer than three billion
dollars
 in 2006. In sharp contrast to
this
, online and mobile
games
 were introduced to the market later( in 2001 and 2002 respectively) and rose sharply within a period of question increasing their sales seven-nine times. Though,it should be admitted that online
games
 surged more dramatically. Overall, there were only two types of
games
 on the market in 2000 ,which had different trends in sales within the
next
 6 years and two
games
 which have been introduced lately but gained popularity rapidly.
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