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You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter • say what the participants liked about the hotel • explain why they were unhappy about the food • suggest what the manage should do to improve the food in future

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My name is Mohammad
solati
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 and I am writing
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 letter as feedback for our firm.
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 of all. I should say that our colleagues and other participants have been satisfied with your hotel
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 your employees.
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, they have treated us with kindness as well as politely with us and I appreciate
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. It goes without saying that they were unpleasant about some parts of your hospitality
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 about the meal. It had a terrible smell and some of our guests did not eat that meal at all. perhaps some ingredients of the
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 were not fresh.
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, our firm have ordered three kinds of
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 yet on that night just two models of
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 have prepared for us and it astonished us. Eventually, we have an offer for your manager, If you are willing to others enjoy your
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 please do not forget that purchasing fresh
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 materials or changing your
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chef
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 is a suitable way for helping your quality. good luck Mohammad Solati
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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