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Some people believe that the activities of large multinational corporations mostly benefit the economies of developing countries. Other people take the opposite view and feel that the large multinationals are generally harmful. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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the charts illustrate the number of participants in two fields, education and science.
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 survey was conducted in developed
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 and industrialised
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 within ten years, starting in 1980. it is clear from the given data that the industry states had more amount of
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 in both sectors,
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 the amount of money was justified in spending in the advanced
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. Regarding the field of schooling, the developed
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 had more than two years of schooling whereas industrialised
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 had four times
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 figure for both periods. in speaking of scientists and technicians per 1000
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, it is obvious that developing counties had less than 20
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, while on the other side of the world it reached about 40
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 in 1980,
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 the number jumped almost double to reach 70 in 1990.
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, the budget for research and development is less than 100 billion in developed
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.
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 amount of money decreased ten years later.
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, the fund for the modern world in
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 field was significant and reached over 300,000,000,000 $.
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