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Many organization and companies ask their staff to wear a uniform. What are the advantages of this?

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 profoundly influenced all aspects of life over the 30 years. Developments
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 technology and social conditions force
employeers
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employers
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 to discipline their workers to wear suitable
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 working hours.
Policy
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 of
uniform
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 several advantages
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 itself
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 as, keeping order up and making
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 to determine the differences
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 departments
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.  Keeping discipline up during
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working hours could be defined as the
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 advantage of wearing the
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.
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, if the policy of wearing
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uniform
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uniforms
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was be
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 flexible, employees might wear clothes that
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inconvenience
 for working.
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 drawback has a significant effect on bosses to keep their structure of
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 conditions up.
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, wearing a
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on
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 the
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work
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workplace
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place
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 helps co-workers to understand that they
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 not
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difference
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 from each other.
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 , they can easily cooperate with their
coeleges
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colleges
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.These all can be counted as the benefit of wearing the
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. The
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 benefit of wearing
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uniform
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 is that
make
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easier
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 to determine who is working
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 which
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, when people go to
hospital
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 they can understand who going to help them as a nurse or a doctor.
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 because they are wearing
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kind
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 of
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uniform
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uniforms
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 helps hospitals in terms of organization. Of
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this
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 situation
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 only valid for hospitals only
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also
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effectual
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 for companies as well.
tWhen
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then
employeers
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employers
employees
 look at their staff they can recognize the difference between manager and crew. In
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 way, they will know which person they are going to interact with. In conclusion, there are several advantages of asking staff to wear a
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. Keeping order up and making
easier
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it easier
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 to determine the differences
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work
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workplace
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place
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 can be listed as the most obvious two.
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