The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?
World
has been changing since the beginning of Add an article
The world
it’s
birth and every era or century has Replace the word
its
it’s
own trends. In course of time those trends Replace the word
its
replaced
with Add a missing verb
were replaced
the
new trends and eras changed, but there is a new trend and it looks like it is not going to be replaced with any other thing in the future, they call that Correct article usage
apply
an
online shopping. Nowadays Remove the article
apply
people
say that online shopping will demolish shops
in cities
and towns, I totally agree with that and next
paragraphs will explain in detail why Correct article usage
the next
enormous
power of online shopping won’t be beaten.
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the enormous
First
and most important reason Add an article
The first
A first
of
growing online shopping is money, when any goods price is compared between the physical store and online store it can be clearly stated that online Change preposition
for
shops
are cheaper and pocket friendly. It can be explained with
two main factors, Change preposition
by
first
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the first
one
is rent and the other one
is customer numbers. Phyiscal
stores will continue to pay rent to be able to Correct your spelling
Physical
making
sales and they will continue to serve Change the verb
make
same
number of customers, Change the article
a same
the same
on the other hand
online stores do not pay for rent and they’re reachable by anyone who lives on earth. High
number of customers and low business running costs let online shopping sales channels Change the article
A high
The high
to
keep prices lower than physical stores and most Fix the infinitive
apply
people
always choose the cheaper one
, that rule never changes and applies to all.
Money is again an
another reason why Remove the article
apply
shops
in towns and cities
are swallowed by online shopping channels,
but Remove the comma
apply
in
a different perspective. Change preposition
from
People
don’t have to get up from their couches anymore when they order something through web
and Correct article usage
the web
it’s
extremely cost effective
for online shoppers. If a party assumed Add a hyphen
cost-effective
that is
going to buy any product from local
store, here are things that Add an article
a local
the local
individual
needs to do, driving is the Correct article usage
the individual
first
phase of it, and increasing gas prices and traffic jams in cities
indirectly make any goods cost higher. Second
phase is parking cost and Change the article
The second
it’s
not an ignorable one
. Furthermore
s/he couldn’t find a chance to compare the prices or get benefited from any promotions which are Add a comma
,Furthermore
higly
common in online shopping.
Previous paragraphs explained why online shopping can’t be beaten and the effects of it will be discussed here. Dead Correct your spelling
highly
cities
will be rising in the future it’s
the result of chain
effect. When local Correct article usage
the chain
shops
starts
to close in a town or city due to less income, Change the verb form
start
government
will start to lose a big portion of Add an article
the government
their
Correct pronoun usage
its
tax
income and when it happens they won’t make any investments Replace the word
taxable
to
the area and job Change preposition
in
opportunuties
for Correct your spelling
opportunities
people
will drop and people
will look for new opportunuties
in Correct your spelling
opportunities
another places
to feed their families or itself. Replace the adjective
another place
other places
Less
Change the quantifier
Fewer
people
means less customer
for local Fix the agreement mistake
fewer customers
shops
and the effect of that chain constantly doubles itself.
As a conclusion, no one
can stand in front of online shopping, no one
is able to stop it’s
popularity and power anymore, Correct your spelling
its
unfortunately
all counted effects of it will Add a comma
,unfortunately
be
Unnecessary verb
apply
rise
in Add an article
a rise
near
future and hopefully the result of it won’t be Correct article usage
the near
devastated
for any of us.Replace the word
devastating
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