The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

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has been changing since the beginning of
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birth and every era or century has
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own trends. In course of time those trends
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with
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new trends and eras changed, but there is a new trend and it looks like it is not going to be replaced with any other thing in the future, they call that
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online shopping. Nowadays
people
say that online shopping will demolish
shops
in
cities
and towns, I totally agree with that and
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paragraphs will explain in detail why
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power of online shopping won’t be beaten.
First
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and most important reason
of
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growing online shopping is money, when any goods price is compared between the physical store and online store it can be clearly stated that online
shops
are cheaper and pocket friendly. It can be explained
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two main factors,
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the first
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one
is rent and the other
one
is customer numbers.
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Physical
stores will continue to pay rent to be able to
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sales and they will continue to serve
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a same
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number of customers,
on the other hand
online stores do not pay for rent and they’re reachable by anyone who lives on earth.
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number of customers and low business running costs let online shopping sales channels
to
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keep prices lower than physical stores and most
people
always choose the cheaper
one
, that rule never changes and applies to all. Money is again
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another reason why
shops
in towns and
cities
are swallowed by online shopping channels
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but
in
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a different perspective.
People
don’t have to get up from their couches anymore when they order something through
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the web
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and
it’s
extremely
cost effective
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cost-effective
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for online shoppers. If a party assumed
that is
going to buy any product from
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a local
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store, here are things that
individual
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needs to do, driving is the
first
phase of it, and increasing gas prices and traffic jams in
cities
indirectly make any goods cost higher.
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phase is parking cost and
it’s
not an ignorable
one
.
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s/he couldn’t find a chance to compare the prices or get benefited from any promotions which are
higly
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highly
common in online shopping. Previous paragraphs explained why online shopping can’t be beaten and the effects of it will be discussed here. Dead
cities
will be rising in the future
it’s
the result of
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effect. When local
shops
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to close in a town or city due to less income,
government
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the government
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will start to lose a big portion of
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tax
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income and when it happens they won’t make any investments
to
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the area and job
opportunuties
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opportunities
for
people
will drop and
people
will look for new
opportunuties
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opportunities
in
another places
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to feed their families or itself.
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people
means
less customer
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fewer customers
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for local
shops
and the effect of that chain constantly doubles itself. As a conclusion, no
one
can stand in front of online shopping, no
one
is able to stop
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popularity and power anymore,
unfortunately
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all counted effects of it will
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rise
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in
near
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future and hopefully the result of it won’t be
devastated
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for any of us.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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