With increasing populations and ever growing urban centers, many countries are losing their natural beauty spots. What benefits are there to protecting places of natural beauty? How can this be solved?

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issues.

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jungle.

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destroy natural beauty

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carbon dioxide and

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. There are various solutions

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nature

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people

adopt

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building concept because it

protect

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environment

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the need of human beings.

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protect

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issues.

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people

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deforstation

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deforestation

to build housing area. The

government

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responsibilities

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to protect and take care of there. That protect with

endangred

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endangered

situation

such

as global warming, pollution and other more.

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With increasing populations and ever growing urban centers, many countries are losing their natural beauty spots. What benefits are there to protecting places of natural beauty? How can this be solved?

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Some people believe the professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.