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ome people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views, and give your opinion.

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The unpredictable progress of society brings several notable notions with them which are interconvertible the rising tendency of education is one of them, many
people
 claim that studying in universities is a great career option, while, others reject
this
 notion. To
this
, the essay will
further
 elaborate on both views and
thus
 will lead to a logical conclusion. Without any qualms, education is
a
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the
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 key to 
success
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the success
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 which means, education plays a vital role in a student's life. Studying in college and university has the majority of career options which has benefits for their upcoming future.
For example
, After getting Degree
people
to
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have options for jobs like teacher, doctor, engineer and so on.
Thus
, it is only possible if
people
 have master's degrees from college. On the other school of thought, getting a job after completing school never goes full life.
In addition
,
people
 just complete their today's needs by doing small jobs .
For instance
,
people
 who worked in malls or factories cannot do the same job after 10 years because the owner changed their duty every year.
Therefore
, after a few ,years
people
 do nothing In conclusion,
although
, it is a long period of time to continue studies at universities it has a secure future.
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