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global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given graph provides statistics about profit-making around the world of
such
 companies as
Samsung
,
Apple
,
Nokia
,
LG
 and
ZTE
 in 2009,2011 and 2013.The information is provided in billions of dollars. What stands out from the graph, is that
Samsung
,
Apple
 and
ZTE
 followed a similar pattern.
To begin
 with,in 2009 these three corporations stead off from their lowest points( 225-
Samsung
, 20-
Apple
, 50-
ZTE
),
however
, in two years' time their income rose : rapidly for
Samsung
, tripled for
Apple
 and slightly for
ZTE
. In the two following
years
Add a comma
,years
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 they showed the same tendency and reached a peak of 450 for
Samsung
, 150 for
Apple
 and 60 for
ZTE
.
Nokia
 and
LG
,
on the contrary
, have been showing a downward trend within these four years. They started with the highest sales of 440 for
Nokia
 and 110 for
LG
, which gradually dropped to 420 for
Nokia
 and 90 for
LG
. Though, 2013
Nokia
 lost almost half of its initial profit,whereas
LG
 reached the point of 80. Overall,
Samsung
 ,
Apple
 and
ZTE
 have increased their profit,whilst two other concerns' sales have been decreasing constantly within the period of question.
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