the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

The given graphs present gender and
age
statistics of visiting different evening courses, which are offered by the adult education centres during 2009. According to the pie
chart
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there were five
age
groups and the highest share of visitors was amongst people aged 50 and more(42 %), whilst approximately a quarter of attendees
was
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were
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in their forties.The centre was less popular amongst young people,
for example
,there were 16% of those in their thirties and even fewer ( 11%) in the
age
of 20-29 years. The minority of visitors are youth under 20 years(only 5%). Looking into types of activities undertaken by different gender categories, the biggest proportion of women preferred
language
and painting( 40 and 30 respectively),half of them enjoyed drama and only 5- sculpture. Turning to men, most of them preferred painting(25), and
language
(20) and 10 of them chose drama and sculpture ,which 50% of once ,who visited
language
courses. Overall, there were people of a variety of
age
and gender groups ,visiting the centre,
however
,it was the most popular amongst the elderly and middle-aged ones and the most attended activities were
language
and painting
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