More and more people buy a wide range of household goods like television, microwave oven and rice cooker. Do you think this is positive or negative development?

In
this
modern era, technology made our life easier.Squabbling
on
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household
good
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is interminable in today's era. Controversy exists as it whether
buy
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a wide range of
household
goods or impediment to society. In
this
essay, I will weigh up both merits and demerits along with my credibility with
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paradigm. At the start, there are prolific points to agree with the meritorious sides.
First
of all, in recent times,
people
are interested to buy more
number of
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household
things due to
low cost
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produts
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products
are
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avaliable
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available
in the market.
In addition
, it
help
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us to save
our
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times
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especially
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to
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the
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working
people
.
For instance
,
to wash
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all the
cloths
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consumes more
times
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, with the help of
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a washing
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machine
easily
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work could be done. In short, the inducement of its bright side is self-evident.
By contrast
, it is
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that
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throns
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thrones
of
this
area cannot be neglected. The most worrying aspect is that increasing number of
product
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products
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, more wastage in the end which cause
deterimental
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detrimental
causes to the environment.Another observation related to
this
issue is that
buys
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a products
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products
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to make things
to
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do easier way like automatic
machince
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machine
which makes
people
are
more
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lazier.
Hence
it's apparent why many
people
are against
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this
tend
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. To
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,
government
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the government
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should educate
people
to aware
about
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nasty
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the nasty
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effect
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of buying more of the products and encourage them to do recycling the problem.
However
,
household
products
makes
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our life comfortable to do things.
Consequently
, I firmly agree with the given statement.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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