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Because of the global economy, many goods including what we use as daily basics produced by other counties have to be transported for a long distance. To what extent do the advantages oufweigh the disadvantages?

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Globalization has revolutionized our lives in many aspects. A variety of daily use
products
 reaches our
country
 via far distances. It has multiple pros and cons, which
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 influenced our lives every day. I believe that there are high positives, which overweigh the negatives. Globalization has majorly impacted human beings in today’s world. There are multiple benefits which people have experienced.
Products
 are imported into our
country
, as
products
 are available to local people. For ,instance Availability of fruits like Kiwi, which are exported from New Zealand, are local fruits of that
country
 and are tasted by our
country
’s people. Apart from
this
, There are other things which are manufactured at cheap prices and imported into the
country
 to give benefit apply to the end customer.
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imported 82.3 billion
products
 from China in 2022.It is a win-win situation for both
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countries, as it improves the global economy.
In addition
 to
this
, It improves relations within the different countries due to exports and imports. On the other side, There are impacts on local businesses due to local manufacturing's high cost , which leads to costly
products
 for customers. As we have seen manufacturing industry declined by 10% in the
last
 year.
Furthermore
, customers are reluctant to buy costly
products
. It is published in the local newspaper ‘Times of India’ that manufacturing units were closed
last
 year for the electronic industry.Another reason for that when we transported goods from other countries ,they need to be preservatives, which its fruits nutritions. To conclude, There are high advantages as compared to disadvantages. It is very important for the
country
, end customer and the overall economy.
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