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Solar energy is becoming more and mor popular source of energy in many countries. Why is this? What are the advantages and disadvantages of solar energy?

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Nowadays, due to declining resources inflation can be seen across the globe in almost every sector. Directly or indirectly it has
also
 affected jobs in which employees are not delighted with their work and
money
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 crisis is
also
 being experienced by them. Now, some people encourage the idea of accepting harsh conditions but the opposing group always suggests
to hustle
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 for the betterment of life. In
this
 essay,
views
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 of both
the
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apply
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parties will be discussed and I will show my agreeance
to
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 the latter.
Firstly
, let's discuss
about
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always trying attitude. People in the era of technology are adopting the mindset of never
settle
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. They are never ready to accept their poor or struggling life. They want to achieve something great. Even if they are not having enough financial support or resources, they are still trying to find a way out of it. It is
truely
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truly
 said that hard work always pays off. All these arguments can
he
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 trusted by looking at some great achievers
for
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story
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the story
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 of
an
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 Indian comedian Kapil Sharma clearly shows us that we can always change our conditions if we want to.
However
,
on the other hand
, there are some folks who have
their
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 strong
believe
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 in
accepting
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attitude
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attitudes
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. According to them,
this
 makes a struggling
person
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 mind calm. They think people who are ambitious will never be satisfied because they will get stuck in the loop of always achieving something better. They will never be happy with small outputs.
Consequently
, both mind and body will be affected by it.
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, an unsatisfied person might start to have anxiety or even depression. To conclude, it is undoubtedly evident
the
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 accepting worse scenarios keep us far away from negativity and makes us mentally strong.
However
, trying hard attitude still always wins because at least it will save the person from having regrets of not even struggling to make things better.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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