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In many countries, the proportion of older people is steadily increasing. Does this trend have positive or negative effects on society?

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Nowadays, with the
increasing
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of
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 technology and living standard, the average life expectancy has been alleviated, which leads to a larger
proportion
 of older
people
.
This
 fact has more negative
effects
 than positive
effects
to
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 our
society
.
Firstly
, the population problem,
large
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proportion
 of older
people
, will pose a heavy burden to
government
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. As we all
known
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, our body declines with age, the
people
 older have a more
weaken
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body
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 than younger, the probability of sickness will increase dramatically. With
this
 fact, our government has to spend more
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the
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medical insurance
in
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 older
people
, so they have to pose heavier tax
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to
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 the
people
 or spend less
in
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other public service
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another public service
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. Both of these have negative
effects
to
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 our
society
.
Secondly
, the efficiency of
society
 will decrease because of the large
proportion
 of older
people
. As we age, our ability to work declines. If there is a large
proportion
 of older
people
, the
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 job will have
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a less
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less
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 potential
candidate
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candidates
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, so it’s harder to find a suitable
candidate
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candidates
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 for these jobs. The
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 job
are
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 important exactly,
such
 as the government officer,
scientist
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,
engineer
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engineers
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 and so on.
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of
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above,
this
 population problem can lead to
a
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lower efficiency
of
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society
.
On the other hand
,
the
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older
people
 can pose
a positive
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positive effects
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effects
 sometimes.
The
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people
 who are older can teach a lot to younger
such
 as
philosophy
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 of life, life experience and so on. In conclusion, the
increasing
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of
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proportion
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the proportion
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 of older
people
 has more negative
effects
 than positive
effects
to
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on
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 our
society
.
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