1. These days, people work in more than one job, and often change career several times during their life. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

Nowadays, finding a perfect
job
based on your qualification
is become
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next
to impossible. Because of
this
matter
unemployment
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rate has become
one
of the biggest
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and due to
this
current problem people
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to
work
in more than
one
job
or change their stream which
affect
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their
work
-life balance. In
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I will discuss both the pros and cons of
this
situation.
Firstly
, I strongly believe that changing
career
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careers
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is not
best
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option of all time and doing more than
one
job
can affect your health.
For instance
, if you
work
from morning to evening and start doing
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shift
in
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night
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the night
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which
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will disturb your life cycle and can
also
cause tremendous body pain.
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hand, talking about changing
field
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fields
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which
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can lead you to start from scratch.
For example
, you have studied
about
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a chemist
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chemist
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, and you are working
in
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as a chemist but due to low
wages
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you thought to choose banking as your new
career
without any experience or knowledge you might have to see
down fall
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.
Secondly
, I would
also
say if you knew or have any idea how
the
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things will
work
if you change
career
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, and you are confident about that so you must try switching
career
options. We never know what could
work
for us and from where the opportunity knocks
our
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door. As I mentioned an example of
chemist
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a chemist
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, but you are ready to take all the challenges which will come with
banking
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the banking
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sector, and you knew how the system works so you must go for it. I
also
believe when you are
young
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a young
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adult you should look for jobs as much as possible. Because it will help you to gain capital
also
it will teach you
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the lesson
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lesson
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of
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life
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“how you can increase your contacts” and “how the world works” which will
also
help to build interpersonal and communication skills. After considering all the points, I should conclude that changing stream is not
only
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options
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if you know before changing
career
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that
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what will be the outcome and if
its
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positive so you must change.
Moreover
, if you are young and willing to get experience in
couple
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of fields you must try more than
one
job
which should not affect your health.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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