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The charts below show what percentage of their daily intake of various nutrients the average person in the usa consumes in each meal and in snacks. These nutrients may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

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The pie charts show the proportions of
sodium
, saturated fat and added
sugar
 in breakfasts, dinners, lunches and
snacks
of
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 the American people. Overall, there is more
sodium
 and saturated fat in dinners and more
sugar
 in
snacks
.
To begin
 with,
sodium
 in a typical dinner accounts for 43%, much higher than the figure for lunch (29%) as well as breakfast and
snacks
 (both at 14%), while saturated fat takes up 37% of dinners, 26% of lunches, 21% of
snacks
 and 16% of breakfasts.
In addition
, the percentage of added
sugar
 is the highest in
snacks
 at 42% whereas that for dinner is
also
 significant (23%).
By comparison
, more
sodium
, saturated fat and added
sugar
 are found in lunch (29%, 26% and 19%) than in breakfast (14%, 16% and 16%). But dinner is the most problematic because it contains the largest proportion of
sodium
 and saturated fat.
Snacks
also
 deserve our attention as they contain the largest amount of added
sugar
.
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