With divorce rates and family breakdowns increasing globally, it is generally accepted that families today are not as close as they used to be. Discuss the causes of this problem and offer some possible solution to it.

It is not
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that, nowadays amount of divorces
are
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increasing universally year by year.One possible solution to
this
problem is to impose heavy taxes on divorces and use
this
money for
children
who do not have parents, that to say they live in
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.
This
essay considers the reasons
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this
problem and
suggest
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some possible solutions to it. One of the
first
cause
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is that in recent years many young
people
and their parents do not take into consideration
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young
man's
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and
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ages to marry.Because they do not have information about family, they cannot take care
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their new families.
Furthermore
, they do not know real life. Another cause
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this
problem is that
,
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today's
children
not as patient as the
people
in the past. Impatience principally causes
to
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divorce.
For example
, we often see some
people
have
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disagreements
and
then
they go to
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court
As a result
, their
children
have to live without their mothers or fathers.
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Nevertheless
, there are solutions.
First
and foremost, the heavy taxes would discourage
people
from divorcing because it would be very expensive. At present taxes are already high for a lot of
people
In addition
, if
children
learn about family and how can
people
provide their family with money,
then
they would ready to marry. Teaching about real life would be
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way to
children
and their future. To conclude, divorce rates and family breakdowns increasing universally and families today are not as close as they used to be.
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