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You recently bought a piece of equipment for your kitchen but it did not work. you phoned the shop but no taken was taken.

#piece #equipment #kitchen #work #shop
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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i
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 had bought equipment kitchen from your shop but it had some problem as bellow. My name is My Huynh and
i
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 would describe the item as follows. It is
a
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 inductions hob model 2022 with
type
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 number
is
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BPL518065. I bought
online
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 and it
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was deliveried
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deliveried
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delivered
my
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 home and when
i
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 opened
i
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seen
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 it
broken
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 surface glass on
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the conner
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conner
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 of it.
Then
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 called to shop and
i
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 talked with Annie. She was
there
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their
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 sell consultant who told me
send
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the damage
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damage
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damaged
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 product to
store
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the store
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 and
promised
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 change another for me
on
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one or two
day
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 more. But today is three
day
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from
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 that day,nobody contact me again and
i
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 do not receive
new
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 one too. In view of
this
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i
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 would like to request that you should consider
this
 situation and could answer me as soon as possible
throught
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through
throughout
this
 Email or my phone number’s 032659895. Thanks and best regards My Huynh
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