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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays some people strangely believe that educating foreign
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, teaching and learning
foreign
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a foreign
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language
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 just is justifiable and useful for
traveling
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 to another country. In
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essay
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 we discuss both views.
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learning
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, the tourism industry depends
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 issue and developing education
foreign
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 languages is very helpful for any citizens who
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 in a country with
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 attractions.
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other
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hand
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 some country that
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been
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less
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developments
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 and they need to
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mother
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 tongue ,in order to
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cultural activity
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survival
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 their
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 more than
learn
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 about another culture.
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some
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someone
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one
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thinks the development
learning
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of learning
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foreign
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a foreign
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language
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 is just considered to travel to foreign destinations
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also
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 very useful for existing better communication between them. In conclusion, in my opinion in
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 we need to learn
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a necessary
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language
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 for raising our communication between humankind.
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English
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language
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is have
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 strong efficiency that you could
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 best relations whit
another human
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other humans
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who
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 around the world.
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i
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 definitely believe for
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tourisms
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tourists
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 and attractions too, some citizen would
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be learned
foreign
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a foreign
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language
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