You are watching television and saw a program being shown early in the morning that contained a lot of violence. You believe the program is unsuitable for that time of day. Write a letter to the manager of the television station. In your letter :- Give reason for writing. Explain what you think the problem is with the program. Say what you would like the station manager to do.

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am one of your

viewes

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viewers

views

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TV9 channels. I am writing

this

letter for you to tell you

the

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about the

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issue

from

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with

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the wrestling

programs

that be on air at 8am every Wednesday.

Firstly

, the

programs

actually are interesting for an adult but I think that unsuitable for

children

under 18.

Moreover

, these

programs

have contained a lot of violence that can lead

children

to copy the action from the

programs

. As you know

children

always

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been interested in copying from what they see.

For instance

, after my

children

watched the program, he already tries the skills with his sister and

this

only will make them worst if they continually see the

programs

However

, the

programs

should not be banned to air. I would like to suggest you

for

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apply

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change the time of

programme

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the programme

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to after 9pm

instead

This

will

over

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cover

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all

children

's bedtimes.

In addition

, you should put signs of underage

restriction

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as people will be more aware of the contents of the

programs

. Thank you in advance, please give

this

matter your immediate response.

Your

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Yours

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sincerely, Lynda

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7 paragraphs

181 words

6.50

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Clear and correct grammar

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