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Some people think that a person improves intellectual skills better when doing group activities. To what extent do you agree? Use specific details and examples to explain your view.

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There is no doubt that various
activities
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 play a significant role in improving
skills
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.
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, it is argued
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some
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that one can enhance their intellectual
skills
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 while participating in
group
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activities
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. I partially agree with
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 notion. In the forthcoming
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i
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 shall elucidate my point of view with relevant examples. To commence with, it is true that when an individual
take
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 part in several
group
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 discussions, they can express themselves more clearly.
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, in
group
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activities
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 people express their opinions on a variety of topics as well as current events resulting in, their way of thinking has improved.
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,
a
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research highlighted that 97% of students report that working in a
group
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 helped improve their learning and collaborative
skills
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 in some way.
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, more people include them in
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group
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the group
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, more their
skills
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 might
be improve
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.
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, in order to boost
skills
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 one can
also
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 engage themselves in many new
activities
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such
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 as brain games. To elaborate
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, tricky mind games stimulate humans to think and solve difficult hurdles which not only sharpen their minds but
also
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 boost their
problem solving
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skills
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.
Besides
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, reading is
also
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 a foremost method for
build
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 up
skills
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. It helps
people
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 intellect by stretching their
mind
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minds
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 to think about things that they do not normally think about.
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, these
characterstics
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characteristics
, are beneficial for intellectual
skills
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 as well as personal growth. In conclusion, I believe that both
the
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ideas are essential in order to increase
skills
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, working with
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group
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a group
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enhance
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enhances
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 the way of thinking, and it is
also
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 undeniable that tricky mind games and reading
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are
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 important for personal growth and intellectual
skills
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • intellectual skills
  • group activities
  • collaborative learning
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving
  • communication
  • interpersonal skills
  • diverse perspectives
  • creativity
  • individual study
  • personal reflection
  • autonomy
  • learning styles
  • approaches
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