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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #climate #change
While the world's
climate
 keeps changing, some people suggest that it is better to adjust
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 the
climate
instead
 of preventing it. I personally think it is impossible as
climate
changes
 affect not only human beings but
also
 everything on the earth.
This
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climate
change
.
Firstly
, an important thing to note is that we cannot adjust
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 the
changes
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 the
environment
 as human beings have been using nature in
this
 world.
For example
, the University of Queensland shows that we live on lands which only occupy 30% of the earth.
Furthermore
, we eat animals and plants which grow well
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 the current
climate
 so it might cause starvation around the world.
Therefore
, it is not easy to find a way to live with the
climate
changes
such
 as the rise of the sea level and global warming because it will impact
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the levels of animals and the livable land
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In addition
, it is easier to prevent
climate
change
 than find
the
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 way to live with the
changes
. As I mentioned above, Changing
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climate
 would affect
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any kind of
environment
,
such
 as the ecosystem and the
environment
. Once we accept the
change
, we need to keep adjusting the
changes
 which would affect everything in our lives, as it is unstoppable. In conclusion, I personally think we should keep an eye on
climate
change
 and try to prevent it since it is impossible to keep adjusting.
Moreover
, we keep living with nature and using the
environment
,
therefore
, putting some effort into keeping the
climate
 is much easier than inventing new ways of living
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • prevent
  • adaptation
  • mitigation
  • cope with
  • effects
  • shift
  • mindset
  • lifestyle
  • balance
  • invest
  • research
  • technology
  • crucial
  • education
  • awareness
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