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Nowadays, many people have to work longer hours, and they feel more stressed out than before. What are the reasons? What can employers do to make their employees' lives easier?

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 should be responsible for that, and there are lots of effective methods that help employers address their employee's anxiety
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. There are two main reasons why a majority of workers believed that they are living with anxiety emotion.
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, they constantly need to work for
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 in information technology companies are given a number of difficult tasks.
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 complain that the hours of work overtime are increasing. So, it is not uncommon that bosses play a major role in the problem of
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 stressed employees have become a popular social issue, there are two ways that can be used to handle it.
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 workers to unwind
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, powerful evidence from a Britain local report, approximately 80%
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 availability. In conclusion, not only should employers have
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 system may be a possible solution,
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Burnout: A state of physical and emotional exhaustion often caused by prolonged stress.
  • Telecommuting: Working from a location outside of the traditional office environment, usually from home.
  • Work-life balance: The equilibrium between personal life and career work.
  • Flexible working hours: A system that allows employees to choose their working hours within certain limits.
  • Occupational wellbeing: The overall mental, physical, and emotional health of an individual in relation to their job.
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