Some educationalists argue that non-exam, arts-based subjects, such as music, drama, art and craft, should be compulsory in the secondary-school curriculum. They believe that activities such as these can improve overall academic performance. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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It is thought that art-related
lessons
are required in school for students
to enhance their learning performance
. Personally, even though I truly support that non-exam subjects
have a variety ~of~ benefits for students
, I do not think they are mandatory in school, which might cause more pressure but not a pleasure for students
.
On the one hand, having arts-related subjects
helps teenagers have more choices to build up their self-confidence. Formal education might not suit all students
, some of them would therefore
struggle with their study path, and their confidence might be undermined by those failures, and then
eventually give up on learning. However
, if schools provide more diverse lessons
, those students
can have more opportunities to find some subjects
they have an interest in, which can motivate them to learn things of interest and cultivate their confidence. Thus
, providing more non-exam subjects
could help them keep learning and ends
up improving their learning Correct subject-verb agreement
end
performance
.
On the other hand
, making these arts-based lessons
a necessary requirement for students
would not be a creative relaxation for students
. Especially for those students
who are not interested in arts, these art classes might become a burden for
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apply
them
because they might feel they do not have enough time to Correct pronoun usage
apply
course
those academic Verb problem
take
subjects
. In addition
, when these creative activities are an obligation, students
could get stressed and lose their enthusiasm for learning the arts. Ultimately, these non-exam subjects
increase children’s burden and pressure, causing them lower
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to lower
performance
in study.
In conclusion, I believe many benefits can come with providing more creative lessons
to students
, however
, schools should give them more choices to encourage their interests
in learning but not make these Fix the agreement mistake
interest
lessons
as enforcement, which might result in more issues for study performance
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