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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed rather than to work for a company or organization why might this be the case what could be the disadvantages of being self-employed

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We live in a
fast moving
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 world with
lot
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 of physical and mental struggles. For most of
us
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,us
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 the main reason for our difficulties is the workplace.
That is
 working for a busy company with tight schedules and targets.
Therefore
, nowadays many like to be self-employed.
However
, there are both pros and cons
for
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self-employment
 as discussed below.
Few
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 good things about
self-employment
 are that you are your boss, you can change your
work
 the way you want, apply and try new ideas and
work
 according to your own time schedule.
As a
result
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 the
work life
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 balance will be very good because it can be changed according to your own preferences.
In addition
, your hard
work
 will take your name up on your field of
work
not
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 someone else’s.
Nevertheless
, there are many negative points for self jobs. One is that
,
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 a person does not get any job security unless you
work
 very hard to make
your
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 business a success. Even
then
, you might end up losing
the
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 job during difficult times.
For example
, during the COVID
pandemic
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the
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self-employed drivers lost their income due to travel restrictions. And small food stalls lost their businesses due to health restrictions.
Moreover
, the responsibility of keeping up with other businesses can add a lot of stress
on
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 your life. And not having a pension and fonts build up the stress more.
Therefore
, in conclusion, I think
the
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self-employment
 has both plus and minus points as mentioned above. One should decide on
self-employment
 after considering all aspects as it is not suitable for all.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employed
  • company
  • organization
  • freedom
  • independence
  • income potential
  • flexibility
  • working hours
  • working location
  • passions
  • interests
  • decision-making
  • business practices
  • disadvantages
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