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Nowadays, many people change jobs quite regularly rather than working in the one company for their entire careers. Why do you think this is happening? How can companies keep their workers?

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Less
people
 tend to have a single career throughout their lives. Even fewer stay in the same company until retirement. Rather than staying in the same place the entire time, today's population change employment regularly. In
this
 essay, I will discuss why it occurs and what can be done by businesses to retain their workers.
To begin
, one of the main reasons someone would leave their work for another is because of career opportunities available somewhere else. Indeed, the possibility of advancement and occupying different positions could offer challenges that a person would seek. Most
people
,
for instance
, would want to become a team lead and so on in the corporate world.
Furthermore
, some individuals would leave for the need for a change. Being in a different working environment with new
people
 can reignite the love for their profession that they might have lost over time plus make new connections, which can be necessary for personal growth. Now, a way for corporations to not lose their workers could be to offer better incentives. Higher pay, great working conditions and time off are strategies that can be implemented and make someone think twice about leaving. After all, why switch jobs when the current one allows for a flexible schedule unmatched by another workplace?
In addition
, employers should talk to their employees about what their goals are within the company and work together to reach those objectives. By teaming up, a worker would feel cared for, which would incite him to stay at the same place rather than looking elsewhere. To conclude, career advancements and the need for change are only a few of the causes of
people
 changing jobs.
However
, employers can counter that by offering better incentives and helping their workers attain their goals.
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