Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, a number of
people
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that pupils should choose any educational institution which they like. Others claim that they need to study science and technology subjects that will be rewarding in the future. I
definetely
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definitely
agree with
first
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belief since students should do what they like.
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this
essay will examine both sides.
First
of all, at the moment we have a multitude of professions. So students should choose
occupation
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that they like,
instead
of studying subjects that relative
with
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science and technology.
Moreover
, not only these subjects can be useful in the future. Every type of
work
benefits society.
For example
,
people
do not give more importance to sports.
However
, please to
sport
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the sport
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we can see
a
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plenty of
advertisings
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. Some of these promotions can illustrate helpful things and even requests for charity.
In addition
, if
people
will choose their less
favorite
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place of
work
, in
soonly
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time they just lose their motivation to
work
in that field. Choosing a job to your liking is
neccessary
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necessary
,
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because with
this
job a person will
work
for life and can get a promotion in that sphere of
work
.
For instance
, most successful
people
do what they like.
Thus
, they never lose motivation and dedication to
work
more and more.
Furthermore
, they feel inspired to do their best and create something new. In conclusion, students do not have to choose a profession related to science and technology. Because
people
should enjoy of their
work
. Every profession
useful
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in our life and has an important place in society
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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