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The bar charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant

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represents
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 data about what graduate and postgraduate
students
 of
UK
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 did after leaving college rather than full-time
work
 in 2008. Overall, it is clear that the number of
students
aimed
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 for
further
 study was higher in both graduate and postgraduate
student
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students
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, while voluntary
work
 was the least significant among them in the given period. Among
graduate
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graduates
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, 29,665
students
 thought about
further
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a further
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 study which was the highest among all four options. In
contras
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, the number of
students
 in
voluntary
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the voluntary
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work
 segment was 3500, which was the least popular destination
of
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 graduates.
However
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part time
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work
 and unemployment seemed quite similar (17735 and 16235 respectively). The
numbers
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 of postgraduates who decided to do
further
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the further
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 study
was
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 2725 and 2535 aimed for part-time
work
. Like graduates, voluntary
work
 appeared to be less popular among postgraduates and the figure was only 345.
Lastly
, 1625
postgraduate
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postgraduates
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 of
UK
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the UK
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 were not in the
work force
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workforce
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 in the given period.
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