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Today there is increase in anti-social behaviour and lack of respect for others.

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It is a pity that in the midst of huge development in every way of
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 there is
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 a growth in the anti-social
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conduct
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 and individuals have become less honour of each other.
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 phenomenon and invite some ways to
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 the situation. Currently, we live in
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 of technology in which the whole Earth has shrunk and become a global village. Everyone is connected to everybody through telephone lines and the internet, but the sincerity of attitude has taken a back seat. To add to it, the youngsters who are at
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 with the new technology think that the elderly are good for nothing and
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 why they do not respect them. The changing family structure is another big cause of
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 lived in joint families and the grandparents were there to control the children. Now there are nuclear families in which both parents go out to work, and children are in a state of neglect in the hands of pervasive media like the TV or the internet. There are many solutions to
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 should revert back to the old joint family system.
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 effects of vast consumerism should be taught to the
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.Neighbourhood associations should be set up to connect
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 to each other. Come to
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conclusion,
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 behaviour and mutual lack of respect in today's times can be dealt with by taking simple measures,
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people and
 government should
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collectively
 take these steps.

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