Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your own opinions.

There are different opinions about that separate
schools
have been developing day by day. While some argue that it is necessary to educate boys and girls in separate
schools
.
Other
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claim that mixed
schools
have benefits for them, On my part, I, believe that the best way they should study mixed school because it has a good effect
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them. To commence with the view on the former group, there are two
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behind their position.
First
is that some countries prefer
to
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mixed
schools
because it has more benefits for their study.
In addition
, they can start different types of competition with each other during studying.
As a result
, they can share their opinions with each other. As well as they start to understand each other from
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time
of
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school.
Also
, it helps their future life.
For example
, males and females can learn
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since
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school. Definitely, other arguments exist too, but the
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mentioned, I believe, do stand out. Turning to the letter group's point of view, they
also
have their own group to justify the position they hold,
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all of some countries use a
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system for students.
Besides
, it has some benefits which
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they can feel more comfortable and do not need to worry about their safety in the dress they wear in the classroom. Girls can play any sports considered only for boys without any hesitation. The ability of other arguments
in
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undeniable but mentioning them is not worthy. In conclusion, the opinions of people have different views. I personally believe that both of the
schools
are good to study
but
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mixed
schools
have more positions sides than others.
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  • co-education
  • gender segregation
  • peer pressure
  • academic performance
  • gender stereotypes
  • discrimination
  • social skills
  • teamwork
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